The Final Dance


Strokes of peach, a blush of pink
Rose she was, he a commoner ant

This great divide made his heart sink
She was royalty, he of lowly descent
Clad in satin, in a fortress of thorns
As the winds came a laughing by
He watched her fall prey to their scorns
Their meandering trail, a sore to the eye ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย 
But her stately gait proved no match
As she swirled across the thorny hedge
Arrogant gusts swept the flower patch
She plummeted from the window ledge

Heartbroken, he hastened to be by her side,
Broken, Of fallen petals in his arms she died…..






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46 responses to “The Final Dance”

  1. Disha avatar
    Disha

    SUPERB poem…
    Extremely well-written ๐Ÿ™‚ ๐Ÿ™‚ ๐Ÿ™‚

    Good luck Blogwati G ๐Ÿ™‚ ๐Ÿ™‚ ๐Ÿ™‚

    I loved the way you have used the phrase “Of fallen petals”…!!

  2. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Thanks Disha……hope to make the cut ๐Ÿ™‚

  3. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Yes DP, all great stories are tragic…:)

  4. Rahul Bhatia avatar

    Best of luck for this well written sonnet:)

  5. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Thanks Ghazala……..could not have been possible without you guys ๐Ÿ™‚

  6. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Thanks Rahul, gonna need loads of it!

  7. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Vishal….every beautiful story has a tragic ending…

  8. Sudeshna Das avatar
    Sudeshna Das

    A love story beautifully portrayed. I LOVED the last two lines!

    Best wishes from Kolkata Knight Writers. ๐Ÿ™‚

  9. Devashri avatar
    Devashri

    superb poem Vinita !!!

    though me have least.. can say no brains regarding poetry, but still I can feel the very emotions, they really are heart touching ๐Ÿ™‚

    Good Luck Blogwati G,best wishes ๐Ÿ™‚

  10. Dinesh Pal avatar

    Lovely poem.. more of romeo juliet

  11. Ghazala Hossain avatar

    My complements, for using the cue line so well and so powerfully..!

    All the best ๐Ÿ™‚

  12. Vishal Kataria avatar

    Novel sonnet. The love between an ant and a flower petal. Never heard of it before. The end makes me cringe.

    Awesome! ๐Ÿ™‚

  13. Diwakar Narayan avatar

    Here I must agree..simple yet superb poetry. Feelings easily conveyed through use of simple words ๐Ÿ™‚

  14. Arvind Passey avatar

    Well, surely here is a story with a lot of infatuation! Love this part… but remain confused about the iambs or even a consistent syllabic count.
    Valiant attempt, I’d say. ๐Ÿ™‚

    Arvind Passey
    http://www.passey.info

  15. Akanksha avatar

    beautiful sonnet, though I have a least brain in poetry but still I can feel the emotions…All the best!

  16. Mridula Chitnis avatar

    The last two lines take the cake or the crown… both actually

  17. Chatty Wren avatar

    Lovely poem! a sad love story!

  18. Punit Dubey avatar

    Not much into poetry, but Love what able to understand easily ๐Ÿ™‚
    Nice composition…

  19. eula avatar
    eula

    WOW n WOW again

  20. Sonia avatar

    Wow.. Mesmerizingly Beautiful ๐Ÿ™‚

  21. Rickie avatar

    This was very pretty!

  22. JANU avatar

    Well done.

  23. Shail Mohan avatar

    Loved it ๐Ÿ™‚

  24. Uma avatar

    Interesting piece.Never knew a love can be a painted this way ๐Ÿ™‚

  25. Confused Soul avatar

    wow.. i think that was just amazing.. very well written ๐Ÿ˜€

  26. insanebloom avatar

    Lovely, sad…beautiful composition.

  27. TTT avatar

    b’ful sonnet !!! i could feel the emotions …

  28. Purba avatar

    Loved and lost? How could you do that to them!

  29. Someone is Special avatar

    beautiful poem.. keep writing!

    Someone is Special

  30. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Diwakar Narayan, a compliment from a poet like you….I must have done something right ๐Ÿ™‚

  31. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Arvind have taken the poetic license a tad bit seriously ๐Ÿ™‚ thanks for dropping by

  32. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Akanksha…if you can feel it, it’s good enough for me.

  33. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Mrids, glad you feel that way….was meant to be the same.

  34. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Chatty, tried as much as I could ….could not bring myself to post a humourous one on this.

  35. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Thanks a ton Sudeshna, KKW defi has a winner in hands. I loved it!

  36. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Punit, in simplicity lies the beauty after all.

  37. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Eula….thanks…you too generous…as usual.

  38. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Devashri, thanks to the team that helped hone my skills.

  39. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Soniaji, Rickie and Janu………muchos gracias!

  40. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Shail……..I am glad you did….peps me up:)

  41. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Uma…love is many a splendoured thing …

  42. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Confused soul……thank you so much, yet again!

  43. Blogwati Gee avatar

    insanebloom, from you, this compliment makes me very happy. Loved your composition as already said that a zillion times ๐Ÿ™‚

  44. Blogwati Gee avatar

    TTT, wish you were one of the judges…lol…thanks!

  45. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Purba, tried playing God…did not enjoy it that much….but tragedy is always more eyeball popping ๐Ÿ™‚

  46. Blogwati Gee avatar

    Someone is Special…..thanks so much for your wishes.

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