Strokes of peach, a blush of pink
Rose she was, he a commoner ant
This great divide made his heart sink
She was royalty, he of lowly descent
Clad in satin, in a fortress of thorns
As the winds came a laughing by
He watched her fall prey to their scorns
Their meandering trail, a sore to the eye
But her stately gait proved no match
As she swirled across the thorny hedge
Arrogant gusts swept the flower patch
She plummeted from the window ledge
Heartbroken, he hastened to be by her side,
Broken, Of fallen petals in his arms she died…..
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Comments
SUPERB poem…
Extremely well-written 🙂 🙂 🙂
Good luck Blogwati G 🙂 🙂 🙂
I loved the way you have used the phrase “Of fallen petals”…!!
Thanks Disha……hope to make the cut 🙂
Yes DP, all great stories are tragic…:)
Best of luck for this well written sonnet:)
Thanks Ghazala……..could not have been possible without you guys 🙂
Thanks Rahul, gonna need loads of it!
Vishal….every beautiful story has a tragic ending…
A love story beautifully portrayed. I LOVED the last two lines!
Best wishes from Kolkata Knight Writers. 🙂
superb poem Vinita !!!
though me have least.. can say no brains regarding poetry, but still I can feel the very emotions, they really are heart touching 🙂
Good Luck Blogwati G,best wishes 🙂
Lovely poem.. more of romeo juliet
My complements, for using the cue line so well and so powerfully..!
All the best 🙂
Novel sonnet. The love between an ant and a flower petal. Never heard of it before. The end makes me cringe.
Awesome! 🙂
Here I must agree..simple yet superb poetry. Feelings easily conveyed through use of simple words 🙂
Well, surely here is a story with a lot of infatuation! Love this part… but remain confused about the iambs or even a consistent syllabic count.
Valiant attempt, I’d say. 🙂
Arvind Passey
http://www.passey.info
beautiful sonnet, though I have a least brain in poetry but still I can feel the emotions…All the best!
The last two lines take the cake or the crown… both actually
Lovely poem! a sad love story!
Not much into poetry, but Love what able to understand easily 🙂
Nice composition…
WOW n WOW again
Wow.. Mesmerizingly Beautiful 🙂
This was very pretty!
Well done.
Loved it 🙂
Interesting piece.Never knew a love can be a painted this way 🙂
wow.. i think that was just amazing.. very well written 😀
Lovely, sad…beautiful composition.
b’ful sonnet !!! i could feel the emotions …
Loved and lost? How could you do that to them!
beautiful poem.. keep writing!
Someone is Special
Diwakar Narayan, a compliment from a poet like you….I must have done something right 🙂
Arvind have taken the poetic license a tad bit seriously 🙂 thanks for dropping by
Akanksha…if you can feel it, it’s good enough for me.
Mrids, glad you feel that way….was meant to be the same.
Chatty, tried as much as I could ….could not bring myself to post a humourous one on this.
Thanks a ton Sudeshna, KKW defi has a winner in hands. I loved it!
Punit, in simplicity lies the beauty after all.
Eula….thanks…you too generous…as usual.
Devashri, thanks to the team that helped hone my skills.
Soniaji, Rickie and Janu………muchos gracias!
Shail……..I am glad you did….peps me up:)
Uma…love is many a splendoured thing …
Confused soul……thank you so much, yet again!
insanebloom, from you, this compliment makes me very happy. Loved your composition as already said that a zillion times 🙂
TTT, wish you were one of the judges…lol…thanks!
Purba, tried playing God…did not enjoy it that much….but tragedy is always more eyeball popping 🙂
Someone is Special…..thanks so much for your wishes.